The Cat Laser

In the middle of summer, there was a scientist named Hank, a cat named Norman and an ugly dog named Rip Lock.

One day, Hank was in his lab trying to invent the world's first laser beam, while his test subject, Norman, was having a sleep in the sun. 

Hank said to his test subject that he would have to get up so Hank could try out his new laser beam. 

Hank got Norman and brought him outside and placed him on the lawn. “Come on, Norman. Let's test this laser beam,” said Hank, while Norman was sighing, "Haaaa." 

Hank tested the laser beam. "Wow! It works, Norman,” said Hank. Norman moaned.

Suddenly, they heard a dog bark. On it was Riplock. Norman hated Riplock. Riplock chased Norman to the big redwood tree across the road, but Norman opened his sharp claws and ran up the big red wooden tree.

"Oh, no!” said Hank. "Norman's stuck up the tree. I’d better call the fire department. They can get Norman out of the big redwood tree.” 

Suddenly, while Hank was dialing the fire department, someone accidentally wet Hank's phone so he couldn’t call. 

Hank was troubled. He didn’t know how to get Norman out of the tree. 

Just then, he looked down at his pocket and saw the laser beam. It could get Norman out of the tree. 

Hank pulled it out and pointed it at the branch Norman was on. He turned it on. Riplock was terrified. He’d never seen a flying cat before. Hank was amazed about how far his laser beam could reach. Hank was also very happy that Norman was out of the big redwood tree. 

Suddenly, an alien U.F.O swooped down and two white aliens ran out and stole the laser beam. Hank got a big shock when the two white aliens ran out. He was a bit sad because the aliens had stolen his prize possession and he had to make another.   
You have used your imagination well, Flynn. You have begun to use pictures-in-the-mind words in the middle of your story. You could use them in other parts of the story, too. You could describe Norman and Riplock for us.